Critique Post for my three characters, Faitayuu Onnifujibecomeanwarrior, Mon Millenniamon_millennia, and Snake/Gearfried/Kataiirongearsolid for duelacademy_r2.

Rip into me! Show me what you're made of! (Comments screened)

I'm really, -really- starting to hate fire.

...that bitch...how dare she do something like that when others are around... harming other people...

I hope I come back soon. I'm starting to really not like Domino as a whole anymore.

...I feel a lot better, after tonight. Even despite everything... I stopped being stressed out about it, and just let things happen.

Glad I could help, everyone.

Dammit! I can't believe I'm feeling burnt out a time like this...

The armor still feels more cumbersome than it should, I can't move nearly as fast as I should be able to, even through all the practice.

I can't be weak, Marias was right, too predictable, too transparent...!

...I won't stop, I can feel I'm getting stronger now... getting more used to it...

I just hope it'll be enough.

Mother fucking... in the end, I didn't even make a difference!

...The Tarot card... and the book...

...Dammit...

[Private to Investigators]

I read through the book. You're not gonna like it.

Man if I didn't still believe humans were good by nature I'd be a lot more pissed than I am right now.

Man am I glad I'm fast, though.

[Private to Investigators]

...So, uh. I think I know who might show up on the news next.

You know I almost feel bad for running X-Sabers now that we've got something like Hunlai.

...Almost, anyway.

[Private]

...He's right. I'm too reactionary at this point. When did I become that way...? I don't even know.

But it's going to stop.

[End Private]

...Hm.

[Private to Jinn, Cyril]

You, Jinn, Cyril.

Tell me what the hell's been going on since I went insane. I need to know.

What the fuck was that guy.

How did he get that into my front pocket.

Fuck. I hurt all over. I'll get better.

Jinn, do you have any cousins who call themselves killers?

...Wait a sec.

...I'm.. pretty sure I thought I couldn't see Duel Spirits.

...Weird.

Well! After last night my head's a little clearer. I'm off the island, so all of you who thought I'd be 'dangerous' can breathe easy, and all of you after my life can mae your way to Domino.

I've got my own stuff I'm doing, anyway. So all you rightfully paranoid sorts don't have to worry about me busting down doors anytime soon.

I need to figure some things out.

...Well, I'm.. out of the hospital.

...I dunno where I'm going from here.

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*Onni's back on the island, folks. He seems to be moving.. semi-sluggish, at least, and he's got this... down look on his face. AS if he's searching for something. Or someone.

..But, hey, he looks sane. That's a plus, right?*

....

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*Hello, anyone who might've already heard the news about Onni being hospitalized in Domino. If you decide to go visit in, he's in a room on his own, which will have roughly 2-3 nurses/doctors in there at any given time, keeping an eye on him. His face looks bruised as hell, and his chest area is extensively bandaged. If he's not actually lying down, he's curled into a ball at the top of his bed.

Come visit.*

Stupid! Why the fuck was I so soft on her? Show her my strength!? She didn't see it at all! I should've shown her that her words didn't mean anything... should've hit hard, yelled louder... been more aggressive!

Tch... I can't go back there right now, she'll be expecting it... I'll have to keep moving for the moment, and then go back and show her just how aggressive I can -really- be.

Idiot.. why was I so soft...

I did it! I actually broke out of there! Hawkeye-san was right!

They've probably already been notified of my escape.. yeah. They definitely have, they'll be looking for me... I can almost hear their footsteps while they're looking for me...

but I'll be looking for them too.

I'll show every last one of those who have slighted me that I'm strong. Those who'd put me down and abuse me, and treat me like nothing...

...Sorry Hawkeye-san. Chouno-san. I have to do this, I have to show that I'm strong enough to take down anyone who treats me as inhuman!

[Private]
G..Goddammit.
[End Private]

...Mn.

Edit: ......No... No...!

...C-Can't be right...but...

She was right... no.. no no no no no...

I'm sorry.... I'm sorry...!

...Stupid, stupid, stupid... why couldn't you get a hold of yourself long enough to help her...?

She's not even using your first name... why would she? You're unstable. Unreliable. More risk than it's worth. She probably doesn't trust you as far as you can throw someone!

Idiot... you can't help anyone... when it comes to Shiroko, you're out of your league. What do you have that's worth anything that Shikou-san doesn't, huh?

...She has every right to be angry, to not talk to you, to be cold and resentful. Especially after that night.

...Keh. what's wrong with me.